First thing to note is the copious usage of "um"s within the first two minutes of this speech. Also worthy of note is using "like." It makes my credibility appear negative even though I am fully confident and knowledgeable of my topic. These small extra words have developed into bad habits which need to be addressed for future speeches. Another thing to pick at is how my body is oriented at a diagonal to the room. I'm slightly faced to the left and I see the side of my head multiple times as I keep looking back.
The transition from the introduction with mentioning Stradivari to the actual presentation of how a violin produces sound was very staggered and cut. It wasn't as smooth as I had hoped it to be when rehearsing. I also appeared to be fascinated by the violin since I didn't make as much eye contact with the audience as Lauren mentioned. It was difficult for me to maintain consistent eye contact since I had to hold the instrument and point out its various features.
There were still several positive features about the presentations. The show-and-tell aspect of the presentation was spot-on and very appropriate for a 6th grade audience. Kids would understand the concepts and body parts of the violin more since there was an actual figure present rather than images. I thought that describing the physics first and then talking about the parts was an effective, organized way of presenting the information. However, I could have focused more on the body parts more than the physics. The passage about the harmonics actually seemed extraneous relative to the presentation as a whole. I felt it was there just for the "show" part in the show-and-tell. Kids would probably find that harmonic concept/sound to be pretty intriguing.
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